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Master’s Degree in Finance, Sample 1st Paragraph

I am pursuing a B.Sc. majoring in Finance and Accounting whilst interning in Real Estate. Excelling academically with an exceptional GPA, I have been admitted to the Business Leadership Program, the University’s Honors Program, and the Business Honors Program. I shall graduate in May 2018 and have carefully researched Master’s programs that will equip me to fulfill my considerable academic potential and to achieve my professional goals. I have concluded that the Master’s Program in Finance at XXXX University is the best ‘fit’ for me given my academic interests and long-term professional goals.

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Master’s Degree in Finance, Transfer from one program to another, Vietnamese-American

Financial institutions are in dire need of interpreters and I am a Vietnamese-American seeking to be of service, putting my Vietnamese/English skills to good use. In this way, I can help Vietnam, my family’s country of origin, to develop economically. I am writing what follows on behalf of my application to transfer from my current program of study to XXXX University Master’s Degree in Finance because of my profound admiration for your faculty in particular and your institution generally speaking. Some of my special areas of interest are the identification of credit card fraud and the maximization of investment portfolio based on market trends; thus, it would be a special honor to study under Professor XXXX, a recognized expert in the area of Portfolio Selection. I especially admire the way that Prof. XXXX came up with a model that is able to approximate the optimal selection of loans. In the area of mortgage risk, I especially admire her integration of macroeconomic factors and borrower behavior; and that of another faculty member in Finance at XXXX, XXXX, whose research focuses on understanding large-scale matrix and its applications in stock market and risk management. I could not be more engaged with his analysis of Risk Premium, Principal Component Analysis. I learned about PCA in my applied machine learning class, and I keenly look forward to learning as much as I can about this technique with so many variations and such power for interpreting large-scale data.

I attended XXXX for Summer School in 2015 and I really enjoyed the international and inclusive community. I will always remember the thermodynamics lectures taught by XXXX, professor in Mechanical Engineering, where he described designing thermo-systems as similar to “walking in a dark cave…using assumptions and mathematical tools to guide us forward.” XXXX also has state-of-the-art facilities, such as the Advanced Financial Technologies Laboratory.  I want to contribute to inventing new machine learning algorithms and predictive software to drive down the cost of making decisions, serving as a consultant with respect to financial markets, agriculture, etc. - an independent consultant who excels at machine learning algorithms and software frameworks, providing his clients with invaluable insights with respect to potential costs and benefits

For a variety of reasons having to do with living in Germany, I wish to transfer to my ideal program, in America, Finance at XXXX University, because it represents all of my new directions and intellectual and social interests. I am no longer a good career fit with the department of industrial engineering at my current university, TU Darmstadt, in Germany. I am very thankful, however, for the great deal that I have learned here, especially about algorithms, statistical learning tools, and applied machine learning. I have found that algorithms can be used to solve a myriad of combinatorial problems such as finding best facility location, data compression, and strategy planning. I appreciate how this becomes increasingly easier to the extent to which the computational power of computers evolves and more efficient algorithms appear. We are soon going to live in a time in which making predictions using machine learning algorithms is very cheap, and such predictions will help corporate and government to reduce potential risks and costs.

I want to explore and invent new prediction tools from scratch, rather than calling written libraries. This is why I hope to continue on in my studies in Finance at some point at the doctoral level. I have participated research in the effect of turbulence on the lift force for 1.5 years. During the course of this research I have mastered the skills of setting up experiment, how to determine the control variables, and how to collect and analyze experiment data. I have been through difficult situations where the data do not fall in the range of our expected values, however me and my supervisor were always working together to find where the problem might arise and redesign the testing apparatus. After 1.5 years of hard work, this research project has turned into a published paper which I had the privilege to put my name on.

First focusing my studies on optics and then industrial engineering, I have experienced success and failure, changes in direction, but could not be more pleased and stable at this time with the balance of my life being dedicated to Finance, which makes all that I have done before relevant, including those endeavors which I have tended to think of as failures over the years, such as designing MATLAB Simulink, designing experiment apparatus, and so forth. I make progress based on failure. I know how to research relevant literature, and make a collection of knowledge for my own use.

I thank you for considering my application to Finance at XXXX.

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Sample Personal Statement for the MSc Degree in Finance, UK, Syrian in UAE

I hope to earn the MSC in Finance at XXXX University so as to have the fullest of opportunities in the banking industry and, in particular, the fields of asset management and corporate finance. Your MSC in Finance Program at XXXX University, in particular, is my first choice for graduate study because of the vast resources of your university and the surrounding area - providing valuable connections and sources of inspiration. I especially appreciate the international flavor and sophistication of your program at Manchester and would be honored to become a part of your academic community.

The internship that I recently completed in the banking industry, has helped me to appreciate and savor increasingly complex issues in finance on a global scale and I could not be more excited about giving all of my energy to this area of inquiry and advancement in global commerce. I see the MSC in Finance at Manchester as the ultimate preparation for a distinguished career spanning many decades to come in banking/asset management.

My average cumulative GPA is 3.3 in my major and rising, and I have also done well in my other course. It is in Finance, however, we are feel that I have the most to contribute and that I have potential for excellence work in this area as shown by already completing Fundamentals of Corporate Finance (A-), International Finance, Essentials of Investments (B+), Bank Management(A-), Analysis of Financial Statement (B+). Currently, I am taking Advanced Corporate Finance, Real Estate Investing and Asset Valuation and will be studying towards my certification as a financial analyst as soon as I graduate. A Bloomberg and Thomson Reuters certified user, nothing brings me greater joy than the mastery of financial software.

A young Syrian man with big dreams, I was born and raised in the UAE; my father has been working here for the past 25 years and is a partner and CEO of a major corporation based in Dubai - a leading property developer. Our family owns property in Dubai as well as St. Kitts and Nevis where we are nationalized. My central professional goal is to become the most successful real estate finance professional possible, trained in the West, based in Dubai. The last time that I visited Syria was in 2010, well before the civil war broke out. At that time, we still owned valuable real estate properties in Syria – most if not all of which have been destroyed. At some point in time when things are calm in Syria and rebuilding is underway, I want to be involved in helping to finance reconstruction, driven most of all by a sense of patriotic and humanitarian calling to the land of my family.

Now, I want to live and learn in London, taking full advantage of the vast international resources of the city in addition to the university. Still 22, my father calls me a young idealist when I talk to him about my dream of helping to rebuild Syria to something like its former glory. Nevertheless, I want to do what I can to help as a finance professional, rebuilding Syria at some point with smart green buildings with sustainable design and architecture.

We in Dubai could not be more excited about having been chosen as the host for EXPO 2020 as this will be an especially valuable opportunity to gain unique experience in design and development on an international level. I hold two Certificates in areas closely related to Finance and I am currently pursuing a third. I completed a market/retail analysis of 3 different malls in the City of Dubai mall complex. This included the world’s biggest mall, The Dubai Mall, and I won the Exceeding Expectations in Critical Thinking Award for this project. As part of the Global Leader Experience Project through Common Purpose, a leadership training program, we visited more than 12 profit and non-profit organizations in Dubai. I will be part of the American University of Sharjah Delegation Team to the Harvard National Model United Nations (HNMUN2017) to be held in February 2017.

I thank you for considering my application to XXXX University.

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